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By all these lovely tokens
September days are here,
With summer’s best of weather
And autumn’s best of cheer.
Helen Hunt Jackson - September
The breezes taste
Of apple peel.
The air is full
Of smells to feel-
Ripe fruit, old footballs,
New books, erasers,
Chalk, and such.
The bee, his hive,
And Mother cuts
Like plates washed clean
With suds, the days
Are polished with
A morning haze.
John Updike, September
I need some help for writing a sales email
I am a sales representative for a cleaning equipment and chemical company. Recently, I have made some cold call to some of the food industry and catering company. I want to sell want the chemical and papers to clean their kitchen and equipment. When I called them, they told me to send our product's information to their email.
I know that many of purchasing managers receive hundred of email per day. Many of them will drop them before open them, the other not get any interest after they have read the email.
I know that there are not many I can do. Due to the price/product of my company. The only things I can do is to improve my email.
My main purpose is to get a chance for a meeting. Then I can give a brief explanation to them and I can visit the their company. It is even better if I can visit their production line. I can make some suggestion to them.
I have sorted out my purposes:
1. keep contact with customers
2. asking for a meeting ( I have refer to some web site, they said that don't mention it in the first email.
3. asking for a visit
4. making sales
I also want to compose a second email to ask for the feedback. Or ask for a meeting. I am afraid that most of them will answer, we don't need it at the moment, or never see them.
Below is the draft email, please give me some advice. I don't want to make it too long, especially the section of introduction our company. Because we are a new company, not too many history to mention.
Dear procurement Manager:
I am writing to introduce our company and our products to you. We supply chemicals, equipment and utensils.
We provide better quality products and sales service that can help our customers to increase their efficiency and productivity.
Enclosed please find the attachment, they are some of our products which are used at kitchen, food industry and catering.
Should you have any enquiries, please feel free to contact me.